tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post8507218897464788582..comments2024-03-29T00:51:16.923-04:00Comments on my juicy little universe: revision IIHeidi Mordhorsthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16496427007514895950noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-11945870512277746382015-02-03T06:15:12.520-05:002015-02-03T06:15:12.520-05:00I love your reflections here and how deliberate an...I love your reflections here and how deliberate and reflective you are when it comes to introducing poetry to children - as something that fits into the rhythm of their little bodies. Loved reading your poem aloud.GatheringBookshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04477710897574769648noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-8892985111991523562015-02-01T15:06:21.076-05:002015-02-01T15:06:21.076-05:00Sounds like a wonderful challenge for yourself. An...Sounds like a wonderful challenge for yourself. And a great idea for a collection. I'd love to hear what the spatula says to the griddle. In rhyme, of course.Dorainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04421672075192660319noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-23082747206697059022015-02-01T07:21:02.462-05:002015-02-01T07:21:02.462-05:00Lovely seeing you and the fam! I think being willi...Lovely seeing you and the fam! I think being willing to revise is another way of flexing your creative muscles, so go Heidi! Perhaps your new challenge will be tapping into the part of you that can find something fresh in a repeated form? Tabathahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14367572663591077922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-89573244189479776082015-01-31T08:02:33.098-05:002015-01-31T08:02:33.098-05:00What I like most about this post is how I feel we ...What I like most about this post is how I feel we are having a conversation. I could be right there with you discussing what I should or shouldn't do when writing. We are always questioning ourselves as writers, even when we have been validated. Doubt goes with the territory. I only wish I could catch the rhyming bug. Some of my students are very good at it. I accept that I am not. Somehow they seem to love me anyway. <br />Keep on, Heidi, Heidi!Margaret Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04434866104385187658noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-28792838756773129602015-01-31T07:59:47.352-05:002015-01-31T07:59:47.352-05:00Add me to the list of folks who think a kitchen an...Add me to the list of folks who think a kitchen anthology for kids would be great idea, Heidi! It's a room they can relate to, "feel at home" with, and all those kitchen tools and gadgets have fascinated many a youngster. I enjoyed following your thinking in this post, pondering what makes some similar rhyme and meter anthologies stand out while others, a much of a muchness. And I loved your closing Milne tribute!Michelle Heidenrich Barneshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02051827857519159837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-34466907174129380852015-01-31T07:41:46.734-05:002015-01-31T07:41:46.734-05:00Gah. I missed the knife and the fork and your illn...Gah. I missed the knife and the fork and your illness. Hope you are better. Hope it was "just" a vile version of kid crud.<br /><br />You are TOTALLY onto something with a new kitchen collection. (be sure to include some kitsch)<br /><br />And I love being able to watch over your shoulder as you REVISE your thinking!Mary Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09078793537148794310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-50224338689723114532015-01-30T22:11:58.658-05:002015-01-30T22:11:58.658-05:00What Julie said...I would buy it and savor it in m...What Julie said...I would buy it and savor it in my kitchen!<br />Buffy Silvermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07223895917772531703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-78540087425984634592015-01-30T20:04:19.130-05:002015-01-30T20:04:19.130-05:00I doubt that any collection you put together would...I doubt that any collection you put together would be "a little boring and samey." You do have a knack for the unexpected!Diane Mayrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09767689319000732296noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-76095537565285359412015-01-30T19:46:02.186-05:002015-01-30T19:46:02.186-05:00I'm loving that last line, Heidi. It's tru...I'm loving that last line, Heidi. It's true we should avoid getting stuck with any kind of poetry. I read your delightful poems Scoop, Knife and Fork. Keep going with the utensils! They're fun poems with real craftsmanship. It's nice to read the different opinions on meter and rhyme vs. free verse poetry for kids. Can it be that we offer them rhyme to read for rhythm exposure and encourage free verse so their ideas can flow freely? I usually teach free verse but understand that students today often are missing the nursery rhyme exposure that many of us grew up with.Joyce Rayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02905709719444916488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-6236268618530325732015-01-30T19:29:53.837-05:002015-01-30T19:29:53.837-05:00A.A. would be proud! Love the idea of a utensil po...A.A. would be proud! Love the idea of a utensil poetry collection. Amy Krouse Rosenthal had success with a couple of PB about utensils (Spoon and Chopsticks). I say go for it!Bridget Mageehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18185985167366724404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-17596854023730797852015-01-30T15:04:45.998-05:002015-01-30T15:04:45.998-05:00I never know how a poem is going to be structured ...I never know how a poem is going to be structured until I start banging it out, word by word, line by line...and I start seeing how it wants to be formed. And personally, I think a collection of kitchen poems is a great idea! Matt Forrest Esenwinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04230063389130167424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-55302262583859110082015-01-30T14:51:22.605-05:002015-01-30T14:51:22.605-05:00Heidi, I would buy that Kitchen Utensils collectio...Heidi, I would buy that Kitchen Utensils collection in a heartbeat! Do it! (and, yes, please, more metered poetry for kids - it is their help-mate for memorization, and the true companion of music, which still flourishes. More meter and rhyme!) <br />Julie https://www.blogger.com/profile/12811523890920763782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-55750875350026038302015-01-30T14:15:29.067-05:002015-01-30T14:15:29.067-05:00Hey, Heidi,
I enjoyed your ditty. What fun.
I'...Hey, Heidi,<br />I enjoyed your ditty. What fun.<br />I'll bet Jack, Shel and A.A. are applauding.Joyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01825251724115541708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-43464217748260781662015-01-30T10:09:18.039-05:002015-01-30T10:09:18.039-05:00First of all, I miss you. Secondly, there was a l...First of all, I miss you. Secondly, there was a lot to chew on with what you wrote about rhymed, unrhymed, forcing kids to stay on a form to long. How I long for the kids to have TIME to find their muse.Charles Watershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18336052424127127605noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-22034588758508186342015-01-30T06:33:25.632-05:002015-01-30T06:33:25.632-05:00Great post. I love free verse, but some poems just...Great post. I love free verse, but some poems just demand to be written in rhyme, which is a good thing because kids love rhyme. Sally Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06094054139556676270noreply@blogger.com