And oh, wait--it's occuring to me that THIS may be the real story of Adam and Eve in the Garden of Eden, and possibly the point of God, to read your mind when your fellow humans can't! Is it cynical to suggest that God is the original Elf on the Shelf? (Surely that's only one edge of the double-edged sword of the Lord, even so.)
But I digress. Catherine offered us this challenge which she found in a series of prompts from the Modesto-Stanislaus Poetry Center in Modesto, CA.Prompt # 6 (for December 20): Our Lips are Sealed…Or Not
Write a poem about secrets——family, community/societal, governmental, personal, etc. This could be a narrative (how the secret(s) started, where it or they led, the along-the-way and final (if any) consequences. For inspiration or starting blocks for your poem, here’s this poem, “Family Secret” by Nancy Kuhl.
I received this brilliant poem in my inbox through Poem-A-Day, so I was thrilled to go in this direction, and did so writing after another Poem-A-Day offering I was taken with: "The Lord's Corner" by Tyree Daye. Here's mine.
I also got excited about Nancy Kuhl's commentary on her "Family Secret" poem and used it for a blackout poem:
Molly Hogan @ Nix the Comfort Zone
Linda Mitchell @ A Word Edgewise
Margaret Simon @ Reflections on the Teche
Your digression made me shake my head and giggle!
ReplyDeleteYou know how much I love your poem, but the addition of the blackout from her commentary adds so much. Wow.
Elf on the Shelf, Sword of the Lord! : ) Secret Behind Blueberries is captivating. I wanted to read it again and again to let it roll around in my brain.
ReplyDeleteHa! Adam & Eve...not so great secret keepers. I still love that secret of snow so much.
ReplyDeleteHeidi, how you took this prompt to town! I appreciate reading all the connections and reasons for writing and your clever thinking. I laughed at God as the Elf on the Shelf. Desi's poem is precious!
ReplyDeleteHeidi, your secret poem and the blackout are in powerful conversation together. Oof. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteI love all of these poems! Secrets really brought out all kinds of good poems. I really love the phrase "raindrops easing into the air."
ReplyDeleteOh, the turn in that poem is so powerful and your word choice resonates throughout. The contrast between the first and second half of your poem is so compelling. I also love the poem you excavated from Nancy Kuhl's commentary. It's perfect! And then you toss in the lovely bonus of that snow poem. You're goin' on all cylinders here! PS I'm not sure your God as Elf on the Shelf thinking works, as I frequently thank God that Elf on the Shelf was NOT around when my kids were young!
ReplyDeleteI guess the 'secret' of secrets is there are no boundaries around which we can keep those we choose & discard others, maybe for the sake of sanity? I love each one, Heidi, & the personal connections you've made. Tell Desi I loved her observations!
ReplyDeleteYour poems are powerful, Heidi. And thanks for including your student's. 3rd grade wisdom - wow.
ReplyDeleteYour poem packs a punch, Heidi! That snake, the fear, the contrast with Daye's poem. I'm in awe. Desi's poem is very sweet. She's lucky to have you as a teacher!
ReplyDeleteThese lines in particular really resonated with me: "you would never know with the words / falling from my hands / that the brightness was all fear."
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your inspiration and your poem with us.
Wow, Daye's poem is so powerful, and so is yours, Heidi. And I love Desi's vision — she sees, as poets do, things that others don't perceive.
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