tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post4065091592917926107..comments2024-03-28T22:27:36.008-04:00Comments on my juicy little universe: npm: the Progressive Poem is here (with bonus music!)Heidi Mordhorsthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16496427007514895950noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-67615036253415874072016-04-30T06:40:36.249-04:002016-04-30T06:40:36.249-04:00I like what you've done, Heidi! A tiny bit of ...I like what you've done, Heidi! A tiny bit of an ego thing from me since you uaed some elegant (talking geometric proof definition here) repetition of my line! This line from a favorite recitation poem, "Harvest Home," uses hive as a verb: "Yes, hive your honey little hummer/ the woods are waving,'farewell, summer.' " I love your version and play on Joy's "hies." Clever all around. In DC for NLAPW "Pen Women" convention. skanny17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07488350213473016250noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-82400040133306069622016-04-28T21:18:32.756-04:002016-04-28T21:18:32.756-04:00"I hive" - that is SO you, Heidi. Great..."I hive" - that is SO you, Heidi. Great line! :0)Robyn Hood Blackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07279289715664168026noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-58244043958857569642016-04-28T21:16:55.627-04:002016-04-28T21:16:55.627-04:00Love the music of your internal rhyme! One can sen...Love the music of your internal rhyme! One can sense the motion of flying through the air, but I wonder what will happen tomorrow, if the character is hiving (finding shelter)...who knows where Sheila will take us!Matt Forrest Esenwinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04230063389130167424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-27947410078283827402016-04-28T17:42:11.680-04:002016-04-28T17:42:11.680-04:00I love that you made up hive, Heidi! I have to adm...I love that you made up hive, Heidi! I have to admit that my first stop after reading your line was dictionary.com! I thought it was so clever but wanted to see the verb definition...but since you made it up, I'm just going to using my imagination for the verb hive!<br /><br />I like your structure! And thanks for the bonus music :-)Penny Parker Klostermannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15043861965501388155noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-30958790041406137782016-04-28T17:35:46.503-04:002016-04-28T17:35:46.503-04:00Ah, the title and punctuation clear some things up...Ah, the title and punctuation clear some things up for me. Who knew we were writing about the wind? Or were we?Margaret Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04434866104385187658noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-16049666245116876212016-04-28T16:14:09.075-04:002016-04-28T16:14:09.075-04:00Hmmm again...I didn't look it up; I just MADE ...Hmmm again...I didn't look it up; I just MADE it up!Heidi Mordhorsthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16496427007514895950noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-59057882269253166652016-04-28T12:17:45.491-04:002016-04-28T12:17:45.491-04:00Hmmm. I think my prospective last line will still ...Hmmm. I think my prospective last line will still work.... Let's see tomorrow. Loved that I had to look up the verb "hive" in this context. Donna Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13738281869266957726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-22433046865386585962016-04-28T08:52:20.010-04:002016-04-28T08:52:20.010-04:00Haven't head that song since before my kids, H...Haven't head that song since before my kids, Heidi. Love that you've found a "character" for us who's zipping, and "hiving" around. Very clever!Linda Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14983144542632353870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-51579559912577510762016-04-28T07:26:07.859-04:002016-04-28T07:26:07.859-04:00Got my work cut for me! I The Association! Love th...Got my work cut for me! I The Association! Love the title too.Sheila Renfrohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07863505792366698713noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-6001709688665506602016-04-28T06:55:25.301-04:002016-04-28T06:55:25.301-04:00Fun line--love your verbs and near rhyme! And the ...Fun line--love your verbs and near rhyme! And the punctuation you added to help make sense of previous lines. So smart:>)<br /><br />And I have a music/poem matchup. "Trees," by Joyce Kilmer (today's Your Daily Poem--http://www.yourdailypoem.com/listpoem.jsp?poem_id=2189) and "The Way I Feel," by Gordon Lightfoot. I adore that song and the whole love/tree analogy. <br /><br />"The way I feel is like a robin<br />Whose babes have flown to come no more<br />Like a tall oak tree alone and cryin'<br />When the birds have flown and the nest is bare"<br /><br />and<br /><br />"Your coat of green, it will protect her<br />Her wings will grow, your love will too"<br /><br />Audio at https://youtu.be/AMOgpau2nkE<br /><br />Trees make a great metaphor for so many things! Happy Poetry Month, Heidi!laurasalashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13807781795919555208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-67649538586375887702016-04-27T22:48:44.500-04:002016-04-27T22:48:44.500-04:00How very west-winderly of you, Heidi! Well played....How very west-winderly of you, Heidi! Well played... and I do love your introduction-to-progressive-poem lines as well. And now I shall "hive." :) THANK You! xoIrene Lathamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04905936104127707762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-83734428544565291882016-04-27T21:10:19.351-04:002016-04-27T21:10:19.351-04:00Exciting turn of events, Heidi! I like your bold m...Exciting turn of events, Heidi! I like your bold maneuvering. Tabathahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14367572663591077922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-39750341409389789312016-04-27T21:05:41.561-04:002016-04-27T21:05:41.561-04:00You have tamed the west wind and the poem with pun...You have tamed the west wind and the poem with punctuation and title--very nice. And I love your 4-verb line (who knew that hive could be a verb? not me.)<br /><br /><br />Windy was my first ever record purchase--at Woolworth's, back in the day (and by the day I think late 60s?) when twelve year olds rode the bus with their friends and hung out downtown.) Thanks for bringing back that memory!Buffy Silvermanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07223895917772531703noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-28227263408169308662016-04-27T19:02:18.517-04:002016-04-27T19:02:18.517-04:00HA! You made the progressive poem behave by punctu...HA! You made the progressive poem behave by punctuating it, and then do double duty as a music match-up! Perfect song!! Mary Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09078793537148794310noreply@blogger.com