tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post6984140320627831503..comments2024-03-17T09:08:47.557-04:00Comments on my juicy little universe: rekiddifying for the new yearHeidi Mordhorsthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16496427007514895950noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-5808115872623716892018-01-08T07:54:14.628-05:002018-01-08T07:54:14.628-05:00A snowy dance!Love it!A snowy dance!Love it!Sally Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02840326270568153356noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-48208697426562140592018-01-08T01:09:19.077-05:002018-01-08T01:09:19.077-05:00The last line paints a picture for me,"spinni...The last line paints a picture for me,"spinning the broom spinning the broom<br /> snowdust-flow ballet," and floats up into the air. I like the rhythm and movement in your poem too Heidi, thanks! Michelle Koganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02575814872372518994noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-34665276323392449412018-01-07T16:16:49.235-05:002018-01-07T16:16:49.235-05:00Such a fun poem. It makes me want to bundle up and...Such a fun poem. It makes me want to bundle up and play in the snow! Kayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08210045352610490115noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-88906177707733250112018-01-07T15:47:45.652-05:002018-01-07T15:47:45.652-05:00Oh, to have snow in an amount small enough to swee...Oh, to have snow in an amount small enough to sweep! Your poem would make a fun action rhyme for little ones to perform.Diane Mayrhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09767689319000732296noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-6422837841764876082018-01-06T23:22:10.230-05:002018-01-06T23:22:10.230-05:00Heidi, this is such a delightful poem, especially ...Heidi, this is such a delightful poem, especially for this time of year. You remind me to bring out my broom for snow removal on my porch. The various motions are simple actions with amazing word play that leads to the ending line that I just love. Children and adults will love this poem. I can't wait to see how you finalize it. For now, I think the piece has great flow and allows for visualization. Thanks for sharing with us.Carol Varsalonahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02589714711155938528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-65942525671109017052018-01-06T11:50:03.374-05:002018-01-06T11:50:03.374-05:00You may think it's for kids, but I am that sno...You may think it's for kids, but I am that snow-sweeper, Heidi! One can do many wonderful things with snow and a broom, and you've caught that magic! Love it!Linda Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14983144542632353870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-90277223277279922552018-01-06T09:50:56.462-05:002018-01-06T09:50:56.462-05:00Snowdust-flow ballet, indeed! Our neighbors often ...Snowdust-flow ballet, indeed! Our neighbors often tease us that a broom is part of our snow removal equipment that lives on our porch every winter. It's an amazing tool -- windows, car roofs, hard to reach spots, and the like. It's also fun to play with! :-)Christie Wymanhttps://wonderingandwondering.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-16709242534362516572018-01-06T09:31:19.904-05:002018-01-06T09:31:19.904-05:00Love the playfulness of this poem! (With a broom l...Love the playfulness of this poem! (With a broom like that, play is just about all you'd get done!!)Mary Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09078793537148794310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-82236141083699167582018-01-06T08:07:41.464-05:002018-01-06T08:07:41.464-05:00You are such a master at word play! I love snowdu...You are such a master at word play! I love snowdust-flow ballet. Margaret Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04434866104385187658noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-3045515460368486072018-01-06T07:49:39.782-05:002018-01-06T07:49:39.782-05:00This is such a fun, active poem. I'm going to ...This is such a fun, active poem. I'm going to try to channel it when I'm shoveling snow. Perhaps it will make it a bit more enjoyable if I can infuse it with childlike wonder :)mbhmainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12368641525885104669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-30541372781554928042018-01-05T23:42:12.938-05:002018-01-05T23:42:12.938-05:00Love that last line. Such a fun one.Happy shovelin...Love that last line. Such a fun one.Happy shoveling!Brenda at FriendlyFairyTaleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13368709489341876324noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-17772774954161777852018-01-05T23:35:34.334-05:002018-01-05T23:35:34.334-05:00Oh, this is so much fun, Heidi! I love all those v...Oh, this is so much fun, Heidi! I love all those verbs and that "snowdust-flow ballet" is perfect.<br />Catherinehttp://readingtothecore.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-13429277674989679162018-01-05T22:20:02.050-05:002018-01-05T22:20:02.050-05:00I feel the movement in the sweeping
Love the imag...I feel the movement in the sweeping<br /> Love the image of the broom ballet.Jonehttp://deowriter.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-82733669451447904602018-01-05T17:55:59.372-05:002018-01-05T17:55:59.372-05:00Oh the broom ballet! Yes indeed you write for kids...Oh the broom ballet! Yes indeed you write for kids, not just supposedly. Keep going! xoIrene Lathamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04905936104127707762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-8478062308275838622018-01-05T17:10:21.694-05:002018-01-05T17:10:21.694-05:00Your post brings back memories of my time in NYC w...Your post brings back memories of my time in NYC where I lived and worked for 6 years.Shovelling snow held much delight for we Australian expatriates. I liked the way your poem employed actions- swinging ,dragging, pounding, spinning to launch lines and you followed with nouns in the next line thus creating a pattern in your brief yet effective composition. Thanks for your words and thanks for evoking sweet memories. Incidentally, today it will reach temperatures of 106 degrees here in Melbourne while the US freezes. Such contrasts.Alan j Wrighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06077195459186935005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-74512755598700854392018-01-05T07:10:43.298-05:002018-01-05T07:10:43.298-05:00Oh, yes....spinning. That wonderful feeling of spi...Oh, yes....spinning. That wonderful feeling of spinning and being the center of the spin. Why don't we do that more as adults? Is it because once were, "big" we bump into things? You took me right to spinning with a broom, spinning in a skirt, nightgown, stick, jump rope. Great memories. <br />I'm so happy you are going to be a kid again in January. But, you are pretty good as a grown up writer too ;)<br />Linda Mitchellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00833034575304594924noreply@blogger.com