tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post7703587000228086758..comments2024-03-24T21:33:34.140-04:00Comments on my juicy little universe: rethinking pinkHeidi Mordhorsthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16496427007514895950noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-13225215732530754472012-02-21T06:06:37.098-05:002012-02-21T06:06:37.098-05:00Thanks for your comments, everyone. You made shar...Thanks for your comments, everyone. You made sharing a draft considerably less risky with your welcoming thoughts.<br /><br />Here's a complete (if not polished) version.<br /><br />Pinctuation Lessons<br /><br />Pinctuation Lesson One:<br /><br />Pinctuation is for everyone, boys and girls,<br />and all must find their precise shades of pink.<br />Winter, spring, summer and fall,<br />we can all dress our sentences <br />to fit the whether.<br />Correct pinctuation is required.<br />Creative pinctuation is inspired.<br /><br /><br />Pinctuation Lesson Two:<br /><br />Every sentence starts with a heart.<br />Pink is the capital of the United States of You.<br />All the weight of your meaning <br />rests on its head.<br />To begin without pink is a capital offense.<br />Make the investment:<br />from its softly solid durability<br />goodness is produced. <br /><br /><br />Pinctuation Lesson Three:<br /><br />In the end, pinctuation marks the moment.<br />Beneath your telling statement beats<br />a feeling colored pink. Your brain believes<br />it’s neutral gray, but heart trumps it.<br />When you ask a question, your<br />whowhatwherewhenwhy quivers pinkly<br />with uncertainty. Why try to hide it?<br />And if you exclaim satisfaction or delight, <br />shock, surprise, excitement,<br />your heart rises to your face, flushed with pink.<br />Pinctuation commands: embrace it!<br /><br />Heidi Mordhorst 2012<br />all rights reservedHeidi Mordhorsthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09902158336083356337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-83054606708176975202012-02-20T10:51:26.638-05:002012-02-20T10:51:26.638-05:00Thanks for posting a draft! I love it! I have mi...Thanks for posting a draft! I love it! I have middle schoolers who still haven't quite gotten some of these lessons.Ruthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12463332371535167975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-18485580132421628392012-02-18T08:24:48.959-05:002012-02-18T08:24:48.959-05:00"however hard we strive to teach them [to rea..."however hard we strive to teach them [to read in Kindergarten nowadays], they're only ready when they're ready."<br /><br />Spent a day with data and common core yesterday. My pink is tired.Mary Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09078793537148794310noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-67629010861876267952012-02-17T17:46:48.269-05:002012-02-17T17:46:48.269-05:00My students always loved when they found an error ...My students always loved when they found an error in my assignments, or when I misspoke. I guess it was often a 'pink' time. When you began, I thought you were going the way of blushing, & you mentioned it when 'your heart rises to your fact', but it wasn't exactly the whole point either. Love that you took this little moment & made much creative fun of it.Linda Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14983144542632353870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-18790237959587873732012-02-17T14:21:48.478-05:002012-02-17T14:21:48.478-05:00In the end, pinctuation marks the moment.
Beneath ...In the end, pinctuation marks the moment.<br />Beneath your telling statement beats<br />a feeling colored pink. <br /><br />Excellent - now to get them to pay heed to the hue!Tarahttp://tmsteach.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-18341354589619426352012-02-17T13:28:09.288-05:002012-02-17T13:28:09.288-05:00Thanks for sharing, Heidi - and as always for a pe...Thanks for sharing, Heidi - and as always for a peek into your very lively classroom. Your poem is blushing and flushing with pink possiblilities... I love "Pink is the capital of the United States of You." And as for Talia - You go, Girl!Robyn Hood Blackhttp://www.robynhoodblack.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-81720461533091040662012-02-17T13:26:31.403-05:002012-02-17T13:26:31.403-05:00Damn fuss-budgets,
Heidi-- I love the start of thi...Damn fuss-budgets,<br />Heidi-- I love the start of this poem and wish you'd been around to hum in my ear.<br />BUT. Since this is just a draft, can I question if you meant "whether" or weather in the first stanza? My big bugaboo,besides typos and misspellings is the durn their, there, they're. I invariably just type "there" when I absolutely know the difference. Do you have a hum for that?<br />I'm off to try writing my own pink poem. Thank you for the inspiration. <br />Hug your kids for me.Joyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01825251724115541708noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-80344331837646119062012-02-17T13:02:29.983-05:002012-02-17T13:02:29.983-05:00"Correct pinctuation is required;
creative pi..."Correct pinctuation is required;<br />creative pinctuation is inspired."<br /><br />Yes to that! In my freelance work, I enforce the rules of Chicago, AP, and the like. As a creative writer, I love breaking the rules when it better serves the spirit of a piece. <br /><br />Thanks for sharing your poem in progress.Martha Calderarohttp://www.marthacalderaro.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1084574475796190316.post-66898783568964493682012-02-17T11:25:28.734-05:002012-02-17T11:25:28.734-05:00Perhaps you can come and sit over my 11 year old&#...Perhaps you can come and sit over my 11 year old's shoulder and hum as he does his homework. He's gotten pretty good at adding punctuation, but he often forgets to start a sentence with a capital letter. (he's dyslexic). <br /><br />I love the idea of "creative pinctuation"!Katyahttp://www.katyaczaja.com/noreply@blogger.com