Friday, April 3, 2015

progressive poem 2015: line 3

Welcome one and all to Day 3, Line 3 of this year's Progressive Poem, curated by Irene Latham.  I'm delighted to participate again this year! I note that as an ever-changing group, we seem to like to take big risks.  In 2012 we spilled our dreams in a spice-scented Moroccan market. In 2013 we danced and dangled under the Big Top of the Poetry Circus.  In 2014 we journeyed clutching sapphire eggs into the company of a blue-eyed friend.

This year Jone and Joy have led us into the wild in so many interesting ways.  These long lines defy regular meter, don't demand rhyme, and give us a whole delta to explore.  I''m fascinated by the "she" who roams it, shoeless and netless.  Let her fend for herself,
let her body be one with the landscape...

She lives without a net, walking along the alluvium deposits of the delta.
Shoes swing over her shoulder, on her bare feet stick jeweled flecks of dark mica.
Hands faster than fish swing at the ends of bare brown arms. Her hair flows 


I see that my blogwidth is not enough to contain these lines; can we break them for today?  Then it looks like this, and what is changed, do you think?
 
She lives without a net, 
walking along the alluvium deposits of the delta.
Shoes swing over her shoulder, 
on her bare feet stick jeweled flecks of dark mica.
Hands faster than fish swing at the ends 
of bare brown arms. Her hair flows


Tomorrow Laura PS at Writing the World for Kids continues the poem, and I bet her blog is wide enough to hold the flow.  Not to get sedimental, but I just love this big ol' collaboration of poets...Go Us!

Follow along each day to see how our poem grows, and join Amy at The Poem Farm for a singable round-up this first Poetry Friday of National Poetry Month!

2015 Kidlitosphere

Progressive Poem

1 Jone at Check it Out
5 Charles at Poetry Time Blog
7 Catherine at Catherine Johnson
8 Irene at Live Your Poem
9 Mary Lee at Poetrepository
10 Michelle at Today's Little Ditty
11 Kim at Flukeprints
12 Margaret at Reflections on the Teche
13 Doraine at DoriReads
14 Renee at No Water River
17 Buffy at Buffy's Blog
18 Sheila at Sheila Renfro
19 Linda at Teacher Dance
21 Tara at A Teaching Life
23 Tamera at The Writer's Whimsy
26 Brian at Walk the Walk
27 Jan at Bookseedstudio
28 Amy at The Poem Farm
29 Donna at Mainely Write
 



20 comments:

  1. Love "hands faster than fish"! And to get to continue the flow with "Her hair flows"... Such fun! Love, love it! Great job.

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  2. Ha! Getting sedimental over here for sure. :) I can see those fast-moving hands... love getting to know this "she" and think the line breaks are a nice way to "flow."Thank you, Heidi! xo

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  3. Loving this wild and free woman. I also like the line breaks. It's easier to read, but also slows down a bit so we can enjoy the scene.

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  4. Nicely punned, Irene! Heidi, you've added an intriguing bit of information--this woman is powerful (or talented). This is a great start to what is sure to be a fun-filled poem.

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  5. I, too, like these new line breaks. A blog-width-gift-surprise. And "hands faster than fish" - just so perfect!! Happy Poetry Friday, friend. xo, a.

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  6. Thank you all! I hasten to add that in my mind this is not yet a woman but a GIRL. And I admit that the character Mullet Fingers from HOOT by Carl Hiaasen, which I recently read, came into it. Will she be 12ish? We'll have to see what Laura does...

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    1. I pictured a girl of about 12 also! On the verge of independent, curious, etc. but who knows?

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  7. You've added to the "flavor" of this person beautifully, Heidi, and now out in that wide open space, anything can happen. It's already intriguing! Thanks, Heidi.

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  8. "hands faster than fish" makes me think this girl has purpose but is enjoys life.
    The line breaks are perfect!

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  9. Love those hands faster than fish. And your line breaks are a-ok!

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  10. Hands faster than fish could belong to the dragonfly nymph in my poem today...

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  11. I visited Jan Godown Annino's blog right before yours, Heidi. The girl in the Nikki Grimes poem Jan shared is running along the beach where Miss Progressive Poem is walking today.

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  12. Hands faster than fish and flowing hair. What a combination!

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  13. Ooo, this poem is shaping up nicely - the long and short of it. "She" is beginning to take shape, thanks to you, Heidi. =)

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  14. "Not to get sedimental..." Ha! Love it, Heidi. How'd I miss that you were such a punster?

    Your line is perfect-- I love the water references, the hands like fish and the flowing hair. Well done!

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  15. Getting sedimental is such a great phrase. It brightens my day that is filled with a container of liquids and a stack of pillows. Oh, to the stomach bug that has infested my household. Great Job, Heidi at line 3 that you broke into parts for flow-I like it.

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  16. Gosh this poem has a really funky style going on. I'm terrified of breaking it. Groovy line, Heidi.

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  17. Love this yearly progressive poem! I am enjoying the image that is gradually forming here. :)

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  18. Oh, those bare brown arms are lovely. And what is it with you and fish, Mighty Minnows master? I'm late this week - but appreciative. XO

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