inspired by one "little slice of earth," composed by 7-8's!
the
clover
by Caleb
by Caleb
three leaves
smooth
stem
clover blowing
in the wind
very fragile
clover blowing
in the wind
very fragile
purple flower
by Eldana
purple bulbs
light scent
lemon orange
very peaceful
smooth and
hairie soft
and greenie!
Black cracked stick
by Eric
Its smooth wood
by Eric
Its smooth wood
makes me slow
like a sloth, I hear
nothing. it’s peaceful like
a mouse. all I smell
is grassy dust. that’s right.
like a sloth, I hear
nothing. it’s peaceful like
a mouse. all I smell
is grassy dust. that’s right.
clover
by Max
clover round
3
circles soft
green
hole
green like
a pillow
long and
skinny
smells like
strawberries
a little blue
very good
for me!
purple poem
by Xavier
a smooth stem
and
green and brown
quiet
air purple flowers
green
leaves the colors
are
green
and purple
A Different Stickby Patrick
Browny
Broken
Dusty
Jagged
Grassy
Pointy
Cracked
looks likebamboo
A hairy soft
dandelion
smells like
raspberries
looks like a lion
from the top.
Root is smooth and
smells like a soggy
wet dog!
Rocky
Mountainby Elena
Gray and sparkly
rough and
bumpy nothing
but blank!
It’s just a thing
peaceful and quiet
Nothing
to be
heard but something
to seek
heard but something
to seek
clover
by Kathy
bright
clover
light
green
silent
and fuzzy
smells
vegetabley and
Purple flower smooth and
U purple flowe
R. green smooth leaves
Purple leaves smooth & soft
Like dog’s fur.
Elegant purple flower
Two Rocks
by Ziva
Piece by piece broken
and clean slowly chipping
away. Clanking four
sounds, bink, chip, clip and pip.
white and light gray
building together
look like waves from an
ocean’s weather.
dandelion
by Henry
by Henry
fluffy
dandelion
white
and green
smells
like vanilla
and
gasoline its
fluff
is like
a
lion’s mane
soft
like fur
purple flowersby Arya
purpleflowers greenleaves wildbreeze
roots leaves
slowly growing
wind blowing
roots growing
rain pouring sun growing
And there you have it! I guess it's hard to bemoan my own slow pace of writing when I'm busy helping this happen. Jama is helping us happen today by rounding up at Jama's Alphabet Soup. See you there!
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MORNING ADDENDUM! I forgot while wrangling all these poems and photos that my TLD Anthology Poem "A History of Your Voice" is featured at Michelle Kogan's Mother's Day blog post! Please enjoy it, and a beach-day photo of me and my dear, delightful mother HERE! In fact I will be with my mother and father this weekend helping them get ready for a move nearer to us--hooray!--and so my comments will be scarce, I'm afraid. But thank you for yours!
Wow! Such creative young writers, from "soft/and greenie" to "bink, chip, clip/and pip" and so many other wonderful words and phrases. Congrats to the poets and thanks for sharing - terrific pictures, too!
ReplyDeleteEach one unique and showing that essence each one "knows" of the object. I love the serious looks as they show off their piece of nature, Heidi. Congratulations to you and to your poets!
ReplyDeleteThese are marvelous, so many profound budding poets here,
ReplyDelete"Nothing to be
heard but something
to seek"
How fortunate these kids are to have you as their teacher, thanks for sharing all this creativity Heidi!
Michelle, my apologies for forgetting to include, as I posted last night, a link to your rich Mother's Day post! I'm so chuffed to be included, along with my mom, and it's so much fun to see other PF friends with THEIR moms. Thanks so much for inviting me!
DeleteSo much wonderful writing and word play here! I love the specific details, the word choice, the onomatopoeia, etc. This post makes me miss working with younger writers!!!
ReplyDeleteWonderful poems full of imagery. They make me want to go outside and pick a flower, a clover, or a stick to write a poem about. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI also loved your poem for your mother, so full of the word play that you are so good at.
They are all great, but I love Henry's dandelion. "smells like vanilla and gasoline." :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a treat to read these and see those fresh, eager faces! Love the different voices and of course all the great sensory details.
ReplyDeleteAll these lovely poems make me want to go lie in the grass and breathe deeply.
ReplyDeleteWOW! thank you for sharing "the glory of sensory poems" for your students -- their words and faces! I'm bookmarking this post to share with teachers. I really enjoyed your Mother's Day poem and beach photo... the word play is wonderful, and I loved in in my first read, but appreciated even more in my second and third after your backstory.
ReplyDeleteI so love all of these poems. Such talented writers. I'll be tackling more sensory poetry with my Kindergarteners this spring. Lovely! -- Christie @ https://wonderingandwondering.wordpress.com
ReplyDeleteI love these, and your mom poem too. Have a great, productive weekend!
ReplyDeleteI sure do fancy these student poems, Heidi. Such excellent poet-observers! (I think Ziva, especially, has taken a page out of your own book!) It was also a joy to reread your wonderful Mother poem at Michelle's blog today, made all the more special with your commentary and photograph. xo
ReplyDeleteFrom green pillows to soggy dogs - you've got to love the poetic imagery & ideas kids come up with!
ReplyDeleteOh, I hear you on the slow pace of writing. There's so much to write and so little time. But, these students are absolutely inspiring. I hope, decades from now when you are retired--that these beautiful kids will let you see the poetry of their lives that began with you. The word play they feel safe with....browny....greenie....makes me slow. Oh, just wonderful. Well done, Heidi!
ReplyDeleteWho is surprised that your students have written these wonderful poems?! I love all the close observation and comparisons, especially "soft like dog fur" and dandelions that "smell like raspberries!" (Do they? I'm going to have to find out!) Elena's wise words, "Nothing to be/heard but something/to seek," are ones we should all take to heart. Good luck with helping your parents move!
ReplyDeleteHow fun to hear your students' voices (and your voice through theirs)! Have a great weekend!! (When you get the chance, inquiring minds want to know what your class titled their poem!!)
ReplyDeleteI love this peek into your students' imaginations, Heidi - wonderful imagery and observations.
ReplyDeleteHere's my favorite description:
ReplyDeletehairie soft
and greenie
I like the way it sounds!