birthday
secret whistles,
fiery code…
fiery code…
nothing.
happy wrapping
hides the empty
happy wrapping
hides the empty
cage.
something whispers…
furry coat?
thumping?
sniffing whiskers?
subtle wishes,
buried hope…
surprise!
surprise!
eyes
Not just questions--could it be fur, could it be whiskers?--but actual eyes! Thanks to Daisy for the first eye contact between birthday boy and creature. Up to you all whether those eyes belong to the creature or the boy. Or the girl. Or the yo (enjoy this piece on the organic creation of a gender-neutral pronoun in Baltimore). Five more words--make 'em good!
I love "surprise/eyes" -- great job, Daisy!
ReplyDeleteI second Laura's comment!!
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teeth
fangs
a nose
claws
nibbles
velociraptors
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teeth
fangs
a nose
claws
nibbles
peering
tentatively
wide
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glisten
blink
Janet F.
Yes, I like the surprise/eyes too
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paws
ReplyDeleteYou may have already chosen. Your blog doesn't appear in my email until the next day.
ReplyDeleteI like eyes to eyes. Or maybe peer. No this is better...wait.